Ошибки в грамматике, лексике, логике: слушай аудио
4 и 5 абзацы (моя версия):
According to the table, it is evident that teenagers are more likely to form new friendships via social networking sites where, unfortunately, they can face cheating, fraud and blackmail as they are too young, immature and not careful enough. The solution to this problem can be the promotion of places where adolescents can have live and safe communication to make new friends such as hobby and sports clubs.
In conclusion, I want to emphasize the fact that the importance of friendship in teenagers' lives cannot be overestimated. Adolescents need friends to feel safe as they can be a part of a community. However, in this age it is easy to make friends with wrong people, and it is essential to establish friendships with those who a teenager knows personally.